增强语句表现力的方法介绍

时间:2021-08-31

  一、避免使用语意弱的be动词。

  1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:

  Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape.

  Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green.

  2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:

  1) Weak: The team members are good players.

  Revision: The team members play well.

  2) Weak: One workers plan is the elimination of tardiness.

  Revision: One workers plan eliminates tardiness.

  3、在以here或there开头的句子中,把be动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如:

  1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

  Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

  2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

  Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

  二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。例如:

  1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

  Better: My supervisor sauntered past my desk.

  2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.